the sun sets;
as if hiding from the fears it doesnt want to face.
she sits alone watching the light fade.
she wraps her arms around her body;
trying to sheild herself from the cold.
but truthfully,
she's just imagining his touch.
with every breath she takes,
she is reminded that she DOESNT have him;
and that hurts more then rusted razors ever could.
his words echo through her thoughts,
he is the flame upon her bridges that burn so bright
he is face that haunts her dreams at night
he is the reason for her every breath
but he will also be the reason for her self-inflicted death
Author notes
this is really short for me,
but i hope i still got the point across
A contest entry
- a reminder of HIS control... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 5, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Isn't She Lovely [Broken] by Nothing But No.
425 points, ended May 26, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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You most certainly did get your point across. I'm not entirely sure why you chose to capitalize those specific words in your title but it doesn't take away from the message so I will not critisize. Thank you for entering, and best of luck in the contest
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yeah i dont really know why i capitalise words...
i guess its just a quirk.
lolz.
thanks for the comment
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well you have touched the depth..and that makes a logical and impressive point...thanks for sharing it...well done....
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awesum i rlly liked this
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This was very sadley written from a broken heart but look up for God is there...I felt your pain in this and have been there many times but the one thing i learned is that no matter what God has brought me through all i had to do was ask.
Big hugss
Lifetime
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