i forget
the taste of fever
stammering on my tongue
&
i forgive
how you would impose the sun
on my eyes.
you
will not have taught me
grammar stew
with a tinge of choleric
desks.
it is
by candlelight
during power shortage
&
by how much you
wanted
the sarcastic way i
nightfell your english and religion
that i remember you.
Author notes
May 23, 2008
"they may forget what you said but they will never forget how you made them feel." - Carl W. Buechner
You may or may not someday read this.
I'll remember you by how you made me feel you really cared. In spite of other things.
In a list
A contest entry
- quote prompt with a twist by Midnite wolf.
770 points, ended June 2, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any critiques welcome.
Comments
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I appreciated reading this piece of poetry, its depths, your original descriptiveness and especially " the hat of dependency" Memories may be affective or effective, your piece reminds me of my own ability to sieve the warmth from memories made with someone who I believed cared equally, maybe his love was an illusion woven but until the cold light of the day when the truth dawned we had moments treasured within memory,omg,forgive my rambling please.
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Thanks. I enjoyed your "rambling".
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love the ending.
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good stuff
I find rating hard, but I'll keep reading.
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Thank you
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Do we really feel feelings or do we simply remember feelings we've had before and apply them to current situations? Feelings and memories are so intertwined and both have little to do with historical fact.
This poem reminds us: we are what we remember.
Excellent.
Garrison
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"Do we really feel feelings or do we simply remember feelings we've had before and apply them to current situations?" Wow great question. I think we do feel feelings, but they really are based on past feelings too... a bit like perception
lol. But yes, everything in the human mind is closely entwined... Can't separate one from the other. as much as I'd like I couldn't try to answer your question in less than a huge comment 
Thanks a lot for your insightful words 
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Sometimes remembering is more sweet than the moments we lived in them. I am certain you are someone that will always be remembered. A beautiful poem.
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Thank you very much. That's quite a compliment for me
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I'm sick and feel like shit and can't quite articulate how much I love this. It's an excellent take on the prompt you were given, and how true it is! I still remember poems I read when I was eleven for that exact reason. The first half of your second stanza seemed weak to me, but this was great.
"shared
as if the world
weren’t a thin slice
of green paper"
I love this, Diana. So much.
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I've had that exact quote on my page for so long. It is indeed one of the most profound things ever said and your poem reflects it so very well. It is never in the "what" but in the "how" - my personal credo in life. In the end we are all memories and we have a choice to either remember hurt or remember the beautiful. Loved the voice here, Diana - original and authentic as always.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you, Nicolette. And wow, you had that quote on your page??
I really should check your page more often
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Yes - the quote is by Carl W. Buechner
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Thanks for the info I edited my author notes to put the quote author.
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coures you can prompt is - they may forget what you said but they will never forget how you made them feel.
have fun n good luck -
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I love that quote, thanks!
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