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Blended

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

in the moment when we meet
inside each other
like waves colliding
with loud sounds of spumante caps
we tremble the ecstasies of this night

hands held tight above heads
soft tongues speak words
of our private language
and you touch the deepest part of my being
and I caress the lines of your edges

 

 

    in the moment when we meet
    inside each other
    there is no inner or outer space
    when our waters flow
    lines and edges disappear
 


skins, scents and sounds
blended in sweltry rhythms
to recreate the sum of one and one
where one is the only possible result

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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JFTJOI

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  • moon2u silver member
    2 days ago
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    ooooo yes, blended

    I love the title Marigoes

    in the moment when we meet
    inside each other
    there is no inner or outer space
    when our waters flow
    lines and edges disappear

    this part is pure dynamite!
    no lines
    no edges
    no boundaries
    love is limitless
    beautiful


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 2

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    excellent~

    Sensual,loving and passionate...
    Love the imagery and metaphors in this one sis
    Congrats on the Honorable Mention as well
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • LunaSilverStars
    July 12

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    so amazing, almost could not believe it as i read it, i thought it was wonderful, a bit erotic, but quite tasteful at the same time.. i hope to see more from you soon.

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    June 30

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    So in the intimate centre of the event...

    and yes very much including the interior and exterior aspects, uniting them as one. The exterior being a couple and the interior being where they find union which is what I believe this is all about.

    You have gone straight to it and I think it a wonderful description true with meaning.

    Sol


  • quantumsurveyor
    June 24

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    Je suis just loved this sensually charged piece that is both gentle yet dramatically strong. A notable piece worthy of any anthology. "with loud sounds of spumante caps" MAGIC!


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 29

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    “where one is the only possible result” – yes… that is where outercourse and intercourse meet – blended – the title is just perfect, Mari.

    I liked the “water”-metaphors here and not just because I’ve written a similar poem once called “Cape of Storms”! I also liked the way this poem seems to rise and fall, like waves as it moves very subtly between the physical and the emotional. Yes, I agree this is a well-written, tender display of the “finer and higher’ things of lovemaking – and I did not find it to be “looking forward to meet you”, lol – rather a coming together and being “one”. I liked this one…

    Thank you for your entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • leo2
    May 29

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    Alas, I failed that branch of math
    where sums add up, you see
    I tried to add but multiplied
    and one and one made three

    All kidding aside, this is really beautiful in it's sincerity and sensuality. Makes me wish I had studied my sums a little harder. Oh well, you know what they say... pratice makes perfect. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • MariGoes gold member
      May 29
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      Yes, sometimes (many times) the math comes with a number we quite didn't expect
      Thanks Leo for the amusing and lovely comment

  • fathom me
    May 28
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    Love 'love'.... Bookmarked!

  • grm
    May 28

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    this piece is quite sensual, in a breathless, anticipatory way

    still, it does not include the 'outercourse' aspect of the contest's prompt

    this is well-written, but might be better served in a 'looking forward to meeting you' contest

    thanks for entering




  • leander Moderators member
    May 24

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    The alliteration you have here is truly magnificent - Subtle, yet a wonderful touch of detail. The imagery and metaphors are splendid which results in a beauty like this...

    As your son though, I don't like it when I hear my mommer had some last night

    lol


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    May 24

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    Emotion as an art form,
    sensuality celebrated.

    Applauding softly,
    to not break the mood...

    Aesthete

  • forty-one
    May 23

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    Reading this one is like experiencing a waterfall up close, and personal. It's just amazing, beautiful, and well crafted. This is just awesome Mari!... it takes ones breath away.

    41


  • NurseChilly gold member
    May 23

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    tis a joy indeed.. both inside and outside... i feel the serenity of two bodies touching in the night here...

    very very nice...


  • Namita silver member
    May 23

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    "in the moment when we meet
    inside each other
    there is no inner or outer space
    when our waters flow
    lines and edges disappear"

    Ohmygosh, this is definitely bookmarked... EXCELLENT poetry Mari... "to recreate the sum of one and one where one is the only possible result"- the depth of YOUR thoughts is just REMARKABLE.

    ah, perfectly gorgeous.

    - namita


  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 23

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    "skins, scents and sounds
    blended in sweltry rhythms
    to recreate the sum of one and one
    where one is the only possible result"


    this is excellent, Mari...I love it...perfect..what a pleasure it is to read your poetry


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 23

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    well this was a joy to read, title is well done to the idea...blended...and seems people overlook this idea that there can be a meeting on other levels too, maybe even a more important kind of touching...wonderful style a remarkable and beautiful poem...h


  • Jersene silver member
    May 23
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    I love the third stanza...that coming together as one, very beautiful. Lovely penning!


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    May 23

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    mmmmmmmmmmm....is all i can say... i got so lost in every line.
    when a women speaks sensuality... it always feels immaculate

    like this one

    Anna Lee

  • a u r a
    May 23

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    Absolutely beautiful!-I have enjoyed this so much-I can hear the melody- the waves- the emotions-'to recreate the sum of one and one where one is the only possible result'-this is so complete-so eternal


  • Yemassee silver member
    May 23

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    Hopefully Nicolette ignore that silly JFTJOI. It's absolutely beautiful, a voice of yours I hadn't heard in a while, and am glad to see returned.

    You can read, and interpret feelings, those emotions buried deep that can be released only through mutual linking...body, mind, spirit...but deeper, I won't say spiritual, but others may, but I will say, at a level that each needs (hopefully it is both and not just one.)

    This is Mariza G. Goes in top form...it's Brida.

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