‘tis a long way down
first step could be the last
should I take it or wait?
Seeing the world around me
all beauty created by higher hands
yet, in this solitude called life
I wonder ……. about me……..
Author notes
Prompt is from a contest....
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2406457
Life has a way of making you think.
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Not a step anyone should take, but you made it into a great poem. -
No NO NO
the answer is NO it is too far to fall make your step be in reverse.
Does it really stay that dry even through the winters that they have water restrictions in the winter?
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Wow!
The picture says alot, but you have expressed it all in such a profound personal way....So powerful! Wonderful write!
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oops nearly forgot the applause
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Thought provoking
Hi Mook,
You have written such a thought provoking write.I have to agree with all the other comments left on your write, not much more that I could add to as most of it has already been said.Your write is an awsome take on the picture prompt and as always, you were a real pleasure to read.You have great talent and a very beautiful voice.
Take care beautiful one and to you and your loved ones, i send many beautiful blessings of love and happiness.
your loving friend in poetry,
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Take the step. I never have been able to so I seem to want to see someone else do it. It always seems they are successful when they do and I always lag behind. Oh well, that's just me and my silly bashfulness. I need to jump at some point but it becomes more difficult every season. RC
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Full of depth this makes me stop and think hard ...
Love it.
Bookmarked.
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Great write!!! Very thought provoking. When we stand on the brink of the unknowing and examine ourselves it can be scary.. I see you have this marked as sad...yet from it I see a positive...for if we don't take the step we will never know if we succeed... I myself have taken a step and seem to have falling.....maybe it is that I have had time to ponder and start the long climb back up that I can see a positive from your write. Maybe it is the lessons we learn whether we fall down or climb up that when we find who we are. So as you think of life keep in mind that you are a good bad girl and we do think and life is a thinking process. Really Enjoyed!!! Thanks for making me think.
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Thats a long long way to tip a rary. Turn around. You might not be as alone as you think. I wasn't. smile.
Great visual waiting for some good words. It just found them. smile.
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Lemmings do it so why shouldn't we! I feel each day we are on a cliff, and those of us still here didn't jump! Strong poem that questions why we stay when life gets so unbearable, but it's our survival instincts kicking in and our spirit pleading to stay here because they know that there is more to life than this and together we will get there in the end. There is a reason to our existance, and one day all will become clear. Until then reach out to your friends beacuse you are loved by so many.
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Wonderful
What a great take on the prompt. A terrific creation. Thank you for sharing.
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I wonder about me all the time!! And think. . what da hell!!! I wonder about taking that last step too..then think..why hurry it along, it is following closer behind each day. You have given thoughts to ponder. Great write.
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