I need you to love me, my dear, not from the realms of fear.
I want for you to admire me, not because to you I am so dear.
I want it for love's sake, you know, pure and simple like.
I don't need to wonder if I am not in sight what you'd do.
For me, the best option-if I stay clear will you yet stay true?
This is the love I need; the freeing kind that lasts eternally.
To this end, my dear, I release you, knowing full well that...
you may opt to escape my charms, to disdain my arms, or you
may return to me full-force, out of love and out of choice.
Author notes
Option 2 - Quote prompt: "Letting go gives a better grip" - David Crowder Band
A contest entry
- Lowercase's Options Contest by Lowercase Prelude.
600 points, ended May 26, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poet's Choice IV by Luna Tique Fringe.
1750 points, ended June 1, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow.......
THat was pretty good
It touched my heart
and even know you have already
wrote heaps , keep writing
It was awesome
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Great take on the prompt! This could apply to any relationship: parent-child, courting couple, friends, etc. It takes a good deal of inner strength to value one's self and open wide the fingers. Truth can be a hard pill to swallow, but it will endure, whether stifled or enthroned.
Learning to embrace truth frees one, and provides the power to change/grow the self into something more noble and capable.
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this one is pretty fricken raw awesome job
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I was thinking about "If you love something let it go..." the whole time was reading this. This is a excellent take on the prompt and the words ring ever so true. I enjoyed the story here. This was just wonderful!
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This is so beautiful. I want this kind of love too! It is my dream as well. It does exist, and it is out there.
Meme
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My Dream
Wouldn't it be amazing if just everything that turned out bad was redeemed and turned in to good, making bonds stronger (the greater good so to speak). Our society lacks that in so many ways. -
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So true; in so many countless, senseless ways
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Passionate
I have to say "you may opt to escape my charms, to disdain my arms, or you may return to me in full-force, out of love and out of choice", captures so many of my feelings right now.
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I am so glad you found something relevant in this poem; that makes my day lol
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Absolutely beautiful!!!
Great narrative, rhythm & flow...
Feeling the love in this well crafted, well penned & stunningly touching write...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Thank you so kindly; Wow, made my day lol
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What is that old saying? "If you love something set it free, if it comes back it was meant to be" Something like that. We have to let them free, mainly for ourselves, for as your poem says, we need to know if they are true or false. Best to find out and get rid of those that aren't.
Now as far as people cheating...that isn't cool. But that is a discussion for another day. Ah, silver, I just noticed that, congrats!
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Thank you, you're in 'rare' form...I love it though, stay there a whilelol
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Deep and True thank you for your beautiful poem
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This is very good, keep up the great work.
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I'm sure there are many who will identify with the sentiments behind this. The rhythm is not the best...and although this is not a long piece, you might try condensing it some. You might also try a non-rhyming version...maybe something like this for stanza 1:
'I need you to love me,
not from the realms of fear
but for love's sake
pure and simple'
or, you could tell me to go jump in a lake, lol
Very sweet thoughts, none the less. Thank you for entering.
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I would never ever tell such a gifted writer as yourself to go jump anywhere hahaha actually I appreciate constructive critism it makes a better writer of me, hopefully lol
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I'm glad this was taken well, because as I said in the contest rules..I am no expert, lol...
and gifted...lol, maybe practiced would be more accurate, but thanks
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beautiful and sweet!
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Thanks so very much lol
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Dear Lullaby how bravely spoken
words so true ..
the last lines reminded me of the saying
if you love them let them go
yes 'the freeing kind'
sweeps away with this
Brilliantly written and expressed
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Thank you so much for this most lovely review, I certainly appreciate it lol
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A well worded poem. And the statement, that you would let someone go and decide for themselves if they would return. There's something quite heroic in that sort of sacrafice.
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Yes, quite heroic, for sure, but its the only way to rock, isn't it? lol and thanks
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this is beautiful
my favourite part is the last line
great write! keep it up
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Thanks so much for this swell review lol
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Excellent write. Makes one think for a moment... A lot of people can relate to this. I know I can.
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Ah Greg, thanks so much for your input into the review lol
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i liked the way that you laid this poem out, honest and sincere in the way that you used and chose your words. you left breathing room, giving someone the choice makes the return so much more beautiful. great write, a mature out look on admiring and loving someone so much you would give them the choice that they need to make without forcing them.
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Thank you so much for your kind comments, I appeciate it lol
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Look at who's in the spotlight!
WOW
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lol have you been on vacation? smile/thanks
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nothing if not supported ~
energetic preview got me to click...
this was forcefully reflecting beliefs down to principle beyond person. there's a goodness of intentions further implied than what is looked at now in the bond to be felt. you displayed so comfortably in the first two stanzas, I can't pick out a favorite line; especially when on their own it may be quaint but in entirety it's conversationally reaching out.
the third involves the weight of the other opinion needed, with a tightened scan from your "option" to what they may "opt" like a narrow window to match. yet the last verse is opening as agreement not just attraction.
you got me more than in mood to comment but spotlight,
babies are my subject
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a good poem that speaks truth - honesty is all that isasked for here is my love, drifting on a low cloud.
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low cloud? perhaps I can reach it then hahaha
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very nice take on the prompt. and your rhyme scheme was excellent. best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you for having such a challenging contest lol
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