I've succumb to deaths seductive whisper;
"Come my dear, take your place
in the comfort of my warm embrace.
I promise I can dry your tears
and shield you from your greatest fears.
I'll release you from your binding woe,
and all the darkness that you know,
Make your troubles disappear
your secrets not a soul shall hear.
Come, my darling, take my hand
the final step is just to stand."
Holding you close, cheek to cheek
feel your body and knees go weak
A peaceful death far from disgrace
with a gentle kiss upon your face.
To death's whisper I've succumb
no more worries of what I'll become.
A contest entry
- Open for all Poets! by Everlasting Ellen.
2000 points, ended July 18, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Great :)
This is such a good poem. You really feel how gentle death appears. How easy it would be to let go. Its beautiful... Its like, everything you wish death would bring, so well said. -
thats so tru
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Holy Pancakes!
the rhyme and flow of this piece are near perfection...thought this contest is anonymous...I'm fairly sure I know who wrote this.
it's dark but somewhat comforting...Proper punctuation and spelling are always a plus, you may well know..I am somthing of a stickler when it comes so grammar.
very good job, you show a great bit of talent and thanks for joining our little contest
well done, and thanks for the entry,
-Ðustin-
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Lovely write. Its so deep, dark, and forboding. I imagine Chopin's funeral march to this... I love the style, it flows nicely, also good use of vocabulary. I love the idea of a peaceful death, and the line that struck a chord for me was "A peaceful death far from disgrace, with a gentle kiss upon your face" Well done and good luck.
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"O Death, come near me, save me...from this empty, cold, world!"
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great piece! my favorite line was when you said the final step is just to stand. its got good flow and a deep meaning. sometimes life can be hard and you feel like death is just waiting around the corner for you and it would make everything so much easier, keeping you from worrying about anything anymore.
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awesome flow and it's very sad yet full of comfort?
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This poem shows that your not afraid of death as its set out and written, like its an everyday Occurance. I like these lines
Holding you close, cheek to cheek
feel your body and knees go weak
I thought those lines went well together. Everyone meets with Death in one way or another. Great job Rena
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Awwwwwwwwwwww. . .
This is such a sweet yet at the same time evil poem. . .
You have hit many nails on the head with this one. . .
Nyce. . . .
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Its so sad that so many people do give into deaths embrace rather then change thier lives for the better. The poem is sad adn beautiful at the same time. Thank you for sharing this woth us.
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