"Happy Birthday" they sing.
Why I ask;
What is so happy about coming closer to death?
What is so nice about forgetting everything?
Losing everyone?
And becoming weak?
What is so happy about birthdays?
What is so good in losing yourself?
Author notes
I used option 1. Loss of Innocence and I am 13 years of age.
A contest entry
- CALLING ALL TEENAGERS...... by InfiniteCaitlin.
800 points, ended June 9, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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mmm. you are my youngest entry so i will take that into account. Its a great idea to think about and you made me think. Which is a huge plus. I'm sure you havent been at this writeing thing long enough to really develope a style but this is a little sloppy. You need to work onyour language use. Like using descriptive language and portraying images across through your words.
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well I hope that your inner child is kept fed and nurtured always .. with a spirit of fun..
but a great descrip of the loss of innocence ..
I am sad .. that this happens ..
s and much *love
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