Behind this girl's smiles
Tear drops are falling
You don't bother to listen
But here shes calling
Her front is flawless
She doesn't seem to budge
But you're so clueless
As the pain is destroying her
Everything seems to fade
Face of stone
You can't seem to persuade
Author notes
this is unfinished work but I decided to put it in her anyways!!
Written December 23rd, 2003
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Things are not as they appear
Very good. I smile a lot, even though I don't notice it most of the time. I didn't used too, but yah. No one ever noticed what was going on in the inside. Most things turn out for the better. Great write. It is a depressing subject to touch opun, but it is one that not many people can write about and actually make sense. -
yea damn smiles. they always sneak up on ya when your trying your best to be serious! well any way great write.
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oh wow beautiful poem..i love it i know the feeling...no one seems to notice anything is wring with you untill you do something ..ehh depresing subject..great write keep it up.
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Great poem! I felt emotions as I read it. It reminds me of well me when I tried to reach out for help yet no one notices. This was deep. Keep on writing! -
I really liked this poem. It was short... but really powerful. Oh and the description was really good. Write more. BYE!
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wonderful
everyone tells me i smile all the time and when i don't something is really wrong...it's hard to tell when there's really something hurting behing the smile. hope everything works out for you and this is an awesome poem. short but powerful. nice job
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