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This Is Where I Stand

Open your window,
And close your eyes,
I'm just another dream that fills your mind,
Just another rain drop falling from the sky,
I made my choice and I chose suicide.

Spilling blood from my wrists,
I'm getting close to the end,
With more and more bled shed,
I'll soon be dead.

I don't care if you shed tears,
I'm sick of all the pain and all my fears,
Coming home to nothing at all,
I just get yelled at and pushed to the ground,
As I start to fall,
I see images flashing through my head,
It'll will all end soon once I'm dead.

Don't bother to put me in a coffin,
I want be remembered just forgotten,
You see this knife and all these pills,
It's another reason why my life should fail,
You don't know what its like,
To come home and start a fight,
Getting tossed down and beat up,
This is how I grew up,
I've been told my life is a mistake,
That they rather have me dead and my life is fake,
I awake in the morning to nothing but screaming,
You think I'm just dreaming but this is my life.
This is where I stand,
And this is my final night.

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  • AlittleWrong
    November 20, 2008
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    This is freakin ridiculously great. I LOVE LOVE LOVE poems that rhyme but i get turned off very easily if one doesnt do it well. good thing that wasnt the case! I like the flow, the rhyme scheme and i love how real you are when you write. FANTASTIC. awesome, beautiful,


  • Emotional-wreck
    May 23, 2008

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    omgg thank you som much!!!! now i can tell you i loved your poem!!! good luck & thank you for entering.I really liked these lines--->This is how I grew up,
    I've been told my life is a mistake,
    That they rather have me dead and my life is fake,
    I awake in the morning to nothing but screaming,
    You think I'm just dreaming but this is my life.
    This is where I stand,
    And this is my final night.

    Made me feel like i wrote it & it's so relateble & strong.Good luck!!!!

  • Loveherenow
    May 23, 2008

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    emotional wreck wants you to change the abuse thing so she can judge it...she likes your poem and wants to make you a finalist you just need to change label from abuse and your kool =] thank you


  • Soul-Alchemist
    May 23, 2008

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    "I see images flashing through my head,
    It'll will all end soon once I'm dead."

    I love this line; it is very powerful! Keep up the good work and gOoD lUcK!


  • Wings of Insanity
    May 23, 2008

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    Hmmm...you told me what happen before to you, and i took that to heart. But reading this poem made me relize, that no one should ever hurt or hurt you in anyother way....I like this poem alot..it...just makes me cry, im sorry...but nice write


  • Suicide Hotline
    May 23, 2008
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    This is really great Mike! Its so sad...


  • Short but cute
    May 23, 2008

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    OMG This made me cry! Did you really have to go through this. Damn this is good. Really good. I love it. Excelent job


    • Sorrow is the name
      May 23, 2008
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      Yea aBout The abuse and stiff yea
      And i used to cut
      But then i Stopped


      • Suicide Hotline
        May 23, 2008
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        Help me stop.... I just cant.
        (nice pic by the way)

      • Short but cute
        May 23, 2008
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        I'm so sorry! I've been through a type of abuse. I'm still broken from it but It sucks to have gone through that I'm so sorry. -hugs tightly-

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