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uncut

orange peel on my brain
fragile as light rain
resiliant coffee stain
on my favorite shirt I wear anyway

headphones still on up
music's stopped playing

"I need you to breathe"
she's saying

old sayings screaming gleaming new
she fits me like Bruce Lee and Kung Fu
eyes always open under lids
fuck callin' a babysitter cause fuck havin' kids

orange peel on my brain
fragile as a tissue paper crane
the calm explanation
that absolves me of my shame

bristle over again as door clicks and closes
never buying  imagination-free roses
never hiding non-existent bullshit lust for other men
blatantly trust her not to fuck my friends
she won't

orange peel on my brain
fragile as an iron chain
jerking me off in the passenger seat
flip on the blinker and we're on our street

Author notes

a short song...this might suck some ass.  Just trying something different today.
Written December 23rd, 2003

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  • innocence022
    December 24, 2003
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    This was different..very different from your usual stuff but it's good to explore and try out new things. I'm not sure how I feel about it yet...it's good but I feel like it's lacking something..kudo points for doing your thing though