My heart is beating fast
Growing rapidly I start to gasp
For now my breath I can't catch
I feel as if I'm becoming detached
Falling in a tunel spinning so fast
I feel like tonight might be my last
I'm trapped in this darkened space
I hear voices but cant see their face
I hear screams coming from all around
And then I hear this blood rushing sound
Then as if I was never gone
The lights come back on
I'm in the same place
I was in before I went to that dark space
But I hear her say so loud
I hate you so much I hurt you just now
I looked down at my arm still left bleeding
And here she is teasing
Saying I deserve so much more
Because I'm weak and can't pick myself up off the floor
I yell back that I'm trying
And she says oh stop your crying
Before I do more
You stupid freaking whore
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A contest entry
- dark....sad...make me CRY!!! by Emotional-wreck.
420 points, ended May 24, 2008, 14 entries
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Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
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Very deep and sad.
It's a terrible feeling when you
can't seem to break free from your
inner demons like that. Great
work with this one!
Jeremy0826 -
Deep, emotional, dark and sad. A beautiful sad description of enteral emotion. Wonderful job expressing... This touches my heart deeply..
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I looked down at my arm still left bleeding
And here she is teasing
Saying I deserve so much more
Because I'm weak and can't pick myself up off the floor
I yell back that I'm trying
And she says oh stop your crying
Before I do more
You stupid freaking *bunny*
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WOW!!! That is so painful to read!! As someone who self harmed I can understand this pain....
Don't apologise... this is an amazing write, showing strength.. very well written indeed...
I almost cried at the last line as no one is worth that...
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Vicious
Keep yelling back and chase her away.
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Lots of feeling in this and the real meaning behind the actions being expressed... Very strong write for a picture that speaks volumes.
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