Fingers move
Along soft skin
Chill bumps
Rise at the touch
He breathes
Softly in her ear
She sighs
With the pleasure of closeness
The sun sets
Outside the dirty glass window
And casts
Lovely shadows on the walls about the room
He kisses
Her pale lips
She holds
Him close to her body
No space remains
Between the two
Fire burns
Their hearts inside
A contest entry
- Crayon. Ninja's and La Tua Cantante's.... Super Sexah Contest!!! by Crayon.Ninja.
550 points, ended June 5, 7 entries
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Comments
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I really don't know how to react to this one. I'm not really into the whole rubbing on each other type poems, don't take it personally. I mean, if I was into these things I would completely love it. But I just really can't relate or feel anything from this poem. I do have a favorite part though, and that's:
"Fire burns
Their hearts inside"
One thing that sort of made it awkward for me to read is the fact that the lines are spaced a little strangely.
But great job at creating a visual for the reader.
But I too cannot shower you with the oozy lovey comment, so sorry.
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Huh... after reading this I feel a little uneasy and slightly unimpressed. Love poems have never really been my thing so I'm not really won over by this. Tua may completely love it so she may shower you with oozy lovey comments but I can't. Sorry.
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This has fire...passion wrapped in the words. Well written with nice imagery. Nicely done.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
Storm
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