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A Schizophrenic's Hawk

May could set your soul on fire.
The flowers growing from the green
eat me alive sometimes.
Beware for spring; the sun
will surprise you with sins
and bruises badly hidden.
Loss of health on a hazy day,
and no hope in the sight left salivating.
Beware for spring; the mother
turns melancholy this miniature month.
The father tries to pressure with painful
wisdom gained from false clarity.
The stranger might touch, with
influencing invitations.
Happy no more; death calls like
schizophrenic’s hawk.

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    June 7, 2008
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    Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest

    An inkling towards the skin cancer one can get in the sunny days of spring? That was my take..

    Interesting concept and choice of words, please put your option in your authors notes.

    Welcome to allpoetry and enjoy the site
    Good luck in the contest

    Faerie
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  • Kari gold member
    June 2, 2008
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    Welcome To AP

    Hello JaclynFrances,

    I enjoyed this piece but as the others say you need to put what option you picked. If you don't know how to do this feel free and Im me. I'll be happy to help.

    Thanks for your entry & the best of luck!

    Kari,
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  • greyhaime
    May 31, 2008

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    welcome to allpoetry

    thanks for entering the contest,this is an interesting piece, but ou need to put the option number in the authors notes. but well done and good luck,
    cheers
    Grey


  • Dienush
    May 24, 2008

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    "Beware for spring" should be "Beware of spring".
    This is a very insightful poem and I have enjoyed it very much. The last line and this bit:
    "the sun
    will surprise you with sins
    and bruises badly hidden"
    are very creative. And the whole idea of the poem, about each passing spring reminding us that times goes and we have to die, is a very thoughtful concept. Good luck in the contest.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    May 23, 2008
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    An interesting well penned write, however I am a little unsure where this fits in the contest, could you please put the option you picked in your Author Notes

    ♥
    Enjoy AllPoetry
    Thank you & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
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