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a Royal Danish


O, here lies poor Hamlet, in doublet and hose,
immortal his words, tho’ his frame decompose!
In seeking for vengeance, he innocents slew -
then dire friend, Laertes, envenomed, felled two.


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option 6, Shakespeare's Hamlet

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  • BellaD
    June 23, 2008

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    Very creative...from choice of character to eulogize to the clever pun in the title. My only suggestion, and I think it's a bit picky (so take it with the proverbial grain of salt), would be to make the lines iambic pentameter (more Shakespeare-ish). Great diction and rhyme.


    • Mirthryl
      June 23, 2008
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      Thank you, BellaD, for the great comment. It rather wrote itself once it got going Excellent suggestion though, which I will "salt away" for later! Many thanks!


  • penman gold member
    June 12, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative write for a headstone. So well done.

  • Topnotchsy
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow, this is great!! Love the title and your remarkable ability to constantly use interesting (and difficult) language.


  • NeonRose
    May 27, 2008

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    Love your Hamlet headstone! Great title, too! "tho' his frame decompose"..(laughing)...may never eat danish again!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 23, 2008

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    Great write! Sorry to say, I don't remember enough from High School English class with Sister Seretina to give a well considered critique of this headstone. I find it quite funny, though. Love the title - I was drooling for a danish pastry when I came across it on your page!


  • Pearl-1
    May 23, 2008
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    this is a great poem..good luck in the contest..xxx


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    OOO this one is good. I like the was you wrote it... clever Good Luck!


  • Parearoo
    May 22, 2008
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    well done!

    You are the first person to write a headstone for Hamlet in my contest. Most people find anything that has to do with Shakespeare a challange. I actaully made Hamlet a choice in this contest because I wanted to see how many people would take such a challange. I'm VERY happy that at least one person did! :-)
    Your headstone is remarkable! I hope you are proud of it!


  • Kelli Marie
    May 22, 2008

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    A great write. I like how you wrote this one. Would look great on the headstone. I wish you good luck in the contest.
    Kelli

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