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Athsma

Tightness in my chest,
I gasp for breath,
Wanting to sink, subcum to darkness,
Slowly words start to make sense.

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  • marlene47 silver member
    May 28, 2008
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    Very scary; I didn't realize it would feel like that. Great last line!
    Marlene

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 28, 2008
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    I have asthma, I can understand this.