Girl was ticking like a time bomb
Waiting to explode
Girl ran away
After taking the pin out
Of the grenade
Threw it behind her
On your favorite Boulevarde
Boom.
A contest entry
- 30 words by Melissa Gayle.
500 points, ended June 1, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Interesting piece - I would consider removing one of the 'girls' from the piece, they were so close together it was slightly repetitive -
otherwise nicely done. -
Very nice use of imagery. I enjoyed this alot.
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Now, this is amazing...Truly explosive write!
Lynda
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