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Phrases

I love you

opens the heart,

with this ring

I thee wed,

fires the spirit,

rest in peace

mind's prayer.

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20 words

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 28, 2008
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    Very nicely said.


  • marlene47 silver member
    May 26, 2008

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    I like the progression here, especially the final stage/phrase... words that are kept inside.
    Nicely done.
    Marlene


  • going nowhere
    May 23, 2008

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    i like how you used he 20 words as common phrases yet bringing them together with a storyline having beginning, middle and end of loving....