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Baby let the sun shine in my hair.

 Step aside dearest.

I don't want to be your shadow.

{Baby let the sun shine in my hair.}
Let the wind blow right through it. 

 Happiness comes only once in awhile.

Its time to step aside and let me go for a ride on the amazing train.

I don't want to be held back

 I do my own thing.
 

Some people might think were crazy.

 (Maybe I do to ?)

Who knows.

 I'm not right.

 I want to see what everyone else is seeing. 

I wanna love something without fear.

Maybe its time to drive the amazing train.

Move over let the sun shine through my hair.

Let me B R E A T H

 

 

 

Author notes

Just thought I'd write something.
Pink trees

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  • Swordhigh
    July 12
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    This poem relates to how I feel sometimes its very lyrical I like it alot great job


  • Fallen-Muse
    June 12

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    I love this poem... It sounds like it could be a really amazing song. Also I like how you use the brackets and parenthesis. Great job thanks for commenting on my poem


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    You did write something.

    Thank you for doing that.
    Do look at the specifications ~ even the topic!
    Some typos need attention, too.
    Obviously it is a lyric.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    May 26, 2008

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    This is really lovely. I think it would be good set to music. I hope you do well in the contest. Thank you for this entry.


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    May 22, 2008
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    shit i forgot applause. (excuse the french)

  • SarahEatsAirplane
    May 22, 2008

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    hahah i claim the train and dearest parts. as mine. lol. well, i own them in the way that i like them. and i helped come up with them..? well yeah. like owning myspace pics i would suppose.

    this is great. and droid is right. it's like lyrics. (thanks for the comment by the way)this is lovely and it makes me thingly all over. enter this in a contest or two.

    ♥

  • XweXareXbrokenX
    May 22, 2008

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    chelsey i love you and your poems =] they make me happy inside =] i really like this too...free verse suits you very well...i think this poem really describes you...it also sounds very lyrical...you should write lyrics when your older! =]

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