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My Rose

 

 

I thought that you were always mine to hold
To keep beside me through the trials of life
We'd never part until we both grew old
For sixty years we'd live as man and wife

But such a love was never meant to be
When things got tough you could not take the pace
Without you here I never can be free
No other bloom will ever take your place

A perfect rose that wilted in the heat
Your form it seems was just a fine disguise
By any other name you'd smell as sweet
Yet fade away before my very eyes

A virus launched the meanest of attacks
You melted like a rose that's made from wax

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No it isn't a real story, it is a contest entry, the prompt is the picture.

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  • Sailor Ptolema silver member
    May 30
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    you write such splendid sonnets!
    such a sad poem with perfectly fluid rhyme!

  • CinfullyDelicious
    May 28

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    Wow..I could so feel like it was real, very well written Jeff...Like all your pieces it flowed, rhythm so smooth and just a haunting sadness to this, but indeed captivating

    Thank you and good luck



    Cindy


  • ennovy silver member
    May 24

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    Excellent concept you choose to enter this contest...This sonnet is deep and beautiful in a sad way. He has a broken heart....so realistic yet its your imagery at work beautifully.....novy


  • Uasal Laoch Aingeal gold member
    May 23

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    Its an awesome poem Jeff. I liked both the rythm and rhyme and both are flawless. Thanks for the great read and good luck in the contst.


  • PerVirtuous gold member
    May 23
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    Ususlly your sonnets are nothing like a sonnet, so I was shocked to see this one was. Good job.


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 23

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww you liked robbed my darn heart with this piece it is very piercing i think you did a great job withthis thanks for sharing

  • moonbumps silver member
    May 23
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    A sad turn around for you...great sonnet.
    xxx


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 22

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    This was a deep peice that had me in tears. Love should only be that way. I was hoping for the fairytale dream as well, instead I got prince Charming choking the life out of me. But in the end, 6 years after letting go, I can say I found something to at least satisfy for now. I am well lets say, Content.

    Great job here hon. Loved it and the emotion as well, maybe a little of me is rubbing off.(And see you didnt change, LOL, you still rhyme and knock the heck out of form)

    Love you
    Passions


  • Amera gold member
    May 22

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    This is so sad. I may be oldschool but I think love should grow and flurish with age and time. Well written sonnet.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    May 22

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    A beautiful sonnet, but then that's what we have come to expect from you.
    All the best in the contest...Sue x


  • gorgous fairy-cole
    May 22

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    It's sad

    I think it's a beautiful saddness I adore it. It happens this love thing you know when it doesn't work out and it all fades like in the poem, it's touching.

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