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R.I.P myself

Here she lays, down in the dirt
Beneath the starry sky
Who said before, her tummy hurt
Because she ate a fly




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  • GothicAngel92
    May 25, 2008
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    wow rhi that is amazing


  • GothicAngel92
    May 25, 2008
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    lol

  • xxninja-chickxx878
    May 23, 2008
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    OMG

    wow that is an amazing poem!!!! she ate a fly lol


  • Mirthryl
    May 22, 2008

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    Nice rhyming! Put me in mind of an old "Found a Peanut" song Maybe you should have choked down your spinach at dinner, after all!


  • crimsondew
    May 22, 2008
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    lol..good one..hope it never happens though ..
    All the best in the contest!


  • Parearoo
    May 22, 2008

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    WOW!

    lol, this one has given me the biggest smile yet! I love it; a fly would make my tummy hurt too! lol


  • XxWillow LeafxX
    May 22, 2008
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    Interesting!

    Nice work it's a cool way to think about dying. I like the rhyme scheme....

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