her aubergine voice
hooked silence to the glass,
a crooked sigh sideways-
a cannibal heart
with eyes denied a feast,
or one shaped less
like the Martini held
careless and dry.
[ much like herself ]
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Word Count: 34
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A contest entry
- Brevity At Its Best!!! Round 2 * Invite only.* by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended May 31, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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This is the reason I invited you ... a contest such as this would be so much less without you taking part.
Congrats on the well deserved gold
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Oh this is perfect... You took the picture in a similar direction I was thinking.
Sensational emotional imagery Well done and thank you for entering my contest. 
Delila
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Thanks and you're most welcome, though - ahem - being a participant invitee I feel a little like the add-on party guest who steals their inviter's girlfriend
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hehe Your very welcome. It was perfect.
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-Sigh- beautifully moving.
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a deep sigh here with the line in italics....
Excellent...and brevity is done very well with the use of imagery to lead us to the aha moment...
sad though...
the title is perfect....
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I love "cannibal heart" - that just speaks volumes to me. As does being 'held careless and dry' - without passion, without desire, without emotion...you pack such a punch into a few short lines!
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