Lulu Had a bady,
she called it sonny jim
She took it to the bathroom
to teach him how to swim.
He swam to the bottom
and swam to the top,
Lulu got excited and grabbed
him by the cock-tail
Champainge, 2 and 6 a glass
if you don't like it
stick it up your
ass-no questions
tell no lies
if you see a gigolo
open up his flies are usless
bugs are worse
and that is the end of the gigolo
verse.
TC
A contest entry
- It Is Time For Rhyme by Dalaney.
850 points, ended June 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any feed back is always helpful
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As crude as it could get I guess! Two typos...bady-baby, and champainge- Champagne.
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I see those errors
I see those erros and thank you for pointing them out, your comments are most welcome.
TC
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clever, witty, well done. I have never tried this, so it could be fun. "Lulu got excited and grabbed
him by the cock-tail
Champainge, 2 and 6 a glass
if you don't like it
stick it up your
ass-no questions
tell no lies
if you see a gigolo
open up his flies are usless"
Nice Job!
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ha ha . . good take on the prompt . .
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Thanks
All comments welcome, I appreciate yours.
TC
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Nasty.
OK - really nas'sy
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lovely little lilt...
very catchy rhyme and flow..love how you progressed this one..and that is the end of the gigolo verse..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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