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Under the Moon

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Under the moon we embrace

cuddling each other near

The soft moonlight reveals your face

the man I love so dear

 

We stand in the shadows of the moon

peaceful quietness of the night surrounds

I feel the warmth of your loving arms

and melt in the contentment I have found

 

You whisper words of love to me

as I tremble by your touch

I silently wait for you to take me now

I love you oh so much

 

We spread a blanket on the ground

under the moon light rays

Passionately our bodies entwine

making love in amorous ways

 

 

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  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    wow this was a nice thought you penned up under the moon you really did a very great job with this i liked this a lot thanks for sharing and good luck


  • arafura gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    Sweet words that meld together like lovers... Good luck in the contest!


  • Sagerider
    May 22, 2008
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    Great write

    Very visual, nicely done. I enjoyed it.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    Lovely and tender! I love your background with this! Thank you~

    Az


  • FreshDaises
    May 22, 2008
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    Sweet!

    Very sweetly written and gives a great mental pic.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    captivating moonlight romance, you need say little more dear friend . good luck xx


  • Galaxy2
    May 22, 2008

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    Sweet and tender light moonlight
    A poem that relieves rhe tension of life

    Kisses...my dear!

    Galaxy2

  • Papagallo
    May 22, 2008
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    A well written poem as the words flow with such love. In line 10 change I've to I have. Why see the love in "and melt in the contentment I have found" I believe contrations weaken your work. You do have a beautiful poem. The contractions weaken it. Take care,

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