Mice running in circles
colliding with walls,
looking for pathways
that no longer exist.
Conditioned by instinct,
ways are easily lost
in confusing landscapes
that constantly change.
Doorways and exits,
never the same,
too late to go back
if wrong turn taken.
Compulsion for life
deeply ingrained,
mistakes are made
but spirit never gives up.
Author notes
You're not sure what you want, and I'm not sure what this is...lol....maybe they'll connect somehow...
A contest entry
- In The Mood For Anything (Contest) by trista.
600 points, ended June 19, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Superb
Ah, sounds like a good description of the condition of many humans today. So much change, due to gentrification, is taking place; displacing families, neighborhoods, and friends; who knows what's happening. It's like sooner or later we'll all end up being lost in a maze without any familiar landmarks within our cities 'cause so much of possible historical value is being torn down and possibly discarded without any thought of historic preservation.
Why must we destroy what many individuals and families value just so a few can make profits? A most excellent write, indeed.
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Thank you so much 'Clovis6790..' for reading, your wonderful comment and clappies on 'running in circles'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this.
Yes, I think for many humans it's become a way of life, unfortunately. And towns/neighborhoods do change so much over time (I wrote on this - 'main street' - where when one goes back 'home', really all that's left are the memories....and I am right now in the middle of a move that took me back 'home' - only it no longer felt like home).
I live in an 1800's 'town brothel'....lol....have owned a Civil War home, this brothel, another 1800's home also - I am drawn to the older homes and their individual charms and architecture.
Again, thanks.
blessings
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You are quite welcome, my friend. And blessings, also to you.
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Haha...this is so cool!
Yep...I can definitely relate. 
I love the metaphor here. Isn't it wonderful how you can write a poem, never mention humans at all, and yet we internalize the poem and its message to fit us? 
I have this thing about stairways...I always count every step, especially ones I go up and down often...because I'm convinced one day I'll be going down steps in the dark and someone is going to add one extra, just to see me fall flat on my face! LOL I don't know why...but your poem makes me think of that.
Thanks so much for your entry, and best of luck to you!
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~J.
P.S. If you "aren't sure what this is", I'd call it..."a really good poem".
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Thank you Trista - so glad you enjoyed this.
This little 'mouse' counts stairs, too....LOL...I'm afraid of tripping and falling and breaking my first bone!!! I NEED these bones!!...LOL
(and now I JUST had to get glasses so I don't run into those walls!...LOLOLOL
Hope you are feeling better.
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I love this...I understood it...
lol...
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on.
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Thank you so much 'islekine'...glad you enjoyed this! My life seems to constantly be 'running in circles'....LOL
(LOVE your new look!!!)
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Interesting
Yes often we find ourselves in a confused state only we never give up
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Thank you so much 'storiesuntold' for stopping by to read. I appreciate it. Glad you found this interesting.
(sorry, but I have no stars available - for some reason they aren't showing up!!)
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ahhh, this is how I feel at times in my life. like a mouse running from here to there. excellent job with on this poem. I love the last stanza, the most. especially the last line.
good luck
kat
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thank you kat!! Pleased you enjoyed 'running..'.
I feel like a worn-out mouse whose batteries has run down...lol
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This is great I feel like this alot eunning around trying to catch up with myself thanks for sharing goodluck in this contest much love
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Thanks Starz!! I guess we all feel like a bunch of mice...lol
squeak, squeak!...
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I think I am on one of those hamster wheels most of the time!!! Wonderful thoughts here!
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Thanks so much Az! I think I'm one of those mice who wrecks the wheel a lot - or just plain falls off...lol
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I think we are often like mice running in cirlces, crashing into things! But we continue the running... love the ending to this.. spirit never gives up... very encouraging!
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Thank you so much kiwi!! I think the human spirit is going to keep running in circles and crashing into things until it knocks itself out - for good!...lol
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