Hold me,
touch me,
breathe me.
Vapours float,
knowing they will leave you,
to join the one that you love.
The leaving of your body,
is the release of bond
and pressure.
Do not hold on, reach out
faithfully,
to the room of echoes.
Hold me,
touch me,
breathe me.
With low heat,
hot echoes fill the time.
Dim light, sucks dry the moisture.
The room, has lathered on lust,
gripping our backs and thighs.
Night, consumed
loves blazing inferno,
running wild.
No contract to our hearts.
Hold me,
touch me,
breathe me.
Sweet cool air,
breathes slowly, as moisture
envelopes entire bodies.
Soft, gentle breeze, Dries our lips.
The most intense thirsting,
of our kiss.
Saturated with
suculence
of mind, soul and heart.
Hold me,
touch me,
breathe me.
In a list
A contest entry
- Say Goodbye to Blue Rew with gifts of FIRE~~~WATER by Blue Rew.
4650 points, ended June 6, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh my! Any one have a fan?..lol
This is wonderful I adore the passion of this write...
Smiles..
Many blessings to you and your pen
~A~
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hey there im glad you popped by.
im really glad you enjoyed the write, many thanks
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My screen just went foggy! This is one that
will leave a slight tremble each time I read
it. "the room of echoes" is someplace you've
left me desiring. This is all about the moment
and that fits so well with my personality...
How did you know? Your words make me feel
completely female...and slightly intoxicated.
Thank-you just doesn't seem to cover it,
but I do! Blue
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thanks blue, its been a pleasure to enter all your contests and its been great having your friendship
hopefully we can still have one when you leave this site
im really glad you enjoyed this piece
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I love this it's so good. Your an awsome write
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thank you for your kind words
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This poem is HOT!
Wow! This poem is amazing! I absolutely love it! It seems to be somewhat erotic...but not gross erotic; it's very natural sounding. I love the repeated,
"Hold me,
touch me,
breathe me."
It seems to be something that anyone over the age of, like, thirteen or fourteen can relate to; that little yearning everywhere in your body that wants someone or something. To me, reading this felt like being kissed. Wonderful, wonderful job!!
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i really appreciated your well explained comment. its somewhat a talent of mine to describe things and feelings that i either dont have or want to have.
my writes usually pertain to human nature, so therefore i find they are widely accepted by a large variety of peoples.
thank you
jezz
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