Burrowing worms of hate erupt.
Their disfiguring deep infections
Scarring the pristine porcelain canvas.
Perfections fleeting illusion is now defiled.
Author notes
This was a quick write for a contest which I seem to have missed the deadline for...
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Eww, porcelain. I hate porcelain. Anyways, good poem of uncomprehensable ideas. I agree with what someone else wrote too, however, the idea of Marred Perfection as the title gives away a lot of the energy and idea of the poem, almost like spoiling a movie. But you are the artist, and it is your vision. Nice job though, and keep up the good work.
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=truth.
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Excellent work for such a short write. It is not always easy to convey imagery in so few words but you did a great job. Keep up the good work!
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Awesome
This poem is really great. You really get the point across in such few words. Keep up writing like this ! -
such a small poem, but so much strength in the words. i like this alot. wonderful write you have here darling keep up the great work<3
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such a small poem, but so much strength in the words. i like this alot. wonderful write you have here darling keep up the great work<3
-Rizzie -
such a small poem, but so much strength in the words. i like this alot. wonderful write you have here darling keep up the great work<3
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This is great. Short and not so sweet. Is it about the ugliness of spilling your emotions on paper? I may be reading too much into it. It made me think of how so many people use poetry to vent their frustrations or get out their pain, and it was kind of like this, although with painting imagery and not writing imagery. Either way, its a good poem. I like it!
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Hmmmmm
Jangled, which is good..Maybe the title..Defiled instead..How do I convey?...the piece is illusion but the title is concrete..get it. but still great speed write!!!
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I love it ^^ It's morbid...deep and dark... I just love the imagery, it's just really good and I love it ^^
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Well this is a great job it has a lot of truth to it. First of all hate and the evils of such do burrow into people and scar people so the write was well written and thank you for sharing this piece with us!
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Thank you for your comment on 'Marred Perfection' it was meant as a contest entry, with a word count limit, but i missed the deadline...
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This is quite dark and deep. This is layered. I love the imagery conveyed in this, it is strong. Keep writing my friend. This was very good indeed.
With
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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A very thought provoking wright.
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First off all this does not suck Pinches you for saying that it is rather good I like the wording that you used thanks for sharing much love
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