Guilt, Guilt,
Eating my soul.
Shame, Shame,
Swallowing me whole.
Worry, Worry,
What happens now?
Confusion, Confusion,
I keep asking how.
Pain, Pain,
Its here to stay.
Anger, Anger,
Is hidden away.
Author notes
Picture inspired.
A little over 20 words thought. Hope thats ok.
A contest entry
- Dark Quickie 10*20 by Unsigned.
450 points, ended May 22, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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Very interesting poem, such a fun little twist on the rhyme. Well written.
Good luck
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I really like this write alot...great job
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A spooky chant, trying to cast a spell on us? Tiny bit of humor. The poem is well written, seemingly like a spell, almost completely entrancing. Now this is more to you and all others who read the comments, did anyone else notice how each description of the emotion fits to how it commonly is expressed minus anger?
Of course that could just be me but it seems to me that though left unsaid, each of the listed emotions are often like those in much smaller degrees.
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This freaked me out just a little.. don't know why.. Lol.. you did a great job hun.. I liked it..
Angel
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What a visual orgy this pic is! I like the repetition - I think it adds another layer to the power of the poem. Nice Job!
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The over wording is fine...I hate to limit creativity too much..
I really enjoyed these "lyrics"...sounds melodic like a chant or a song
Well done
Simon -
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ooh babe this is really good,
i love the flow oh so much,
you should get some trophie,
i love ya xxx
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ok that is just creepy. Great job, Its actually fun to read out loud, with the echo and all.
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Wonderfully penned, filled with the acidic emotion of guilt. A hidden blade that stabs and cuts us from depths unspoken of. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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