Your idyllic diamond eyes capture me,
leaving me trapped in a frame of fascination.
We can lay on a bed of roses,
our lips sharing secrets until the sun exposes,
true beauty.
Author notes
I was afraid of adding more at the thought of masking the meaning.
A contest entry
- AP Family by Theory Of The Lost.
450 points, ended August 16, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the eternal pleasure... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 13, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Emotive. Lovely thoughts. Congratulations,
~Mary O
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Beautiful immageries and its use as well..thank you so much for such a sweet entry in my contest..well indeed...my friend,.
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I think you were right on not adding more, its very good as is and i think adding more would have taken something away from it, this was short but strong, very well worded, you were able to capture imagery in such a small amount of words very well done. very beautiful and i must tell you that i read you piece "Bring the Salvation" WOW don't know what else to say, from what i have read of yours your a great writer and this piece really shows it well done goo luck in the contest!!
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Oh, this is really a pretty write. Very well crafted. I think you did a great job. Good luck to you in the contest.
Kelli
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