reaching down…
my drowning self looks up at me
dropping a stone into placid waters I watch the ripples destroy reflections
of brighter days |
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Pic credit : Reflection Summers Birth By Prelandra, collected from deviantart
hope not to cliche... hmmmmmmm just something that came to mind
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A contest entry
- PIF......yes PIF...come look ;) by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
1200 points, ended May 24, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats, and well deserved. Wow, I don't have much to say other than I'm very impressed. :-) Great, original take on the picture, and you evoked such strong emotions even in a shorter write. Great poem. :-)
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Seeing ones reflections are mirrors of our lives..How we see our reflecitons depends on thee choices we make..Congrats on the gold....a lot said in a few lines.
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Nice job. . .and a gold trophy!
I like thinking about this poem. I like the take you took with the picture.
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This poem speaks to me because of the last lines....destroy reflections of brighter days...I have had so much in my life try to destroy the reflections of brighter days....
So on a personal level that spoke to me...how you set the poem up I love, the picture right there next to it, just gave even more umph to your words
a short but strong, packed with punch/so much write here
Thank you and good luck
Cindy
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Great take on the pic!! Definitely what I see in it.. the ripples destroying hope...good luck in the contest!
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Ooh, dark and sad
Great take on the prompt! (I don't think cliche but, meh, so am I)
Good luck in the contest.
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i like this a lot, it goes well with the picture. your line structure works very well, the final line by itself gives the piece a feeling of disconnection.
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i love this piece. nothing more to say...just loving it
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hope the judge loves it to Thanks
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Simple but effective.
The emphasis on the word destroy seems to suggest a darkness which isnt apparent at first. Its simple but beautiful in its own way. I like the imagery of calm waters being broken and disturbed. The line "I watch the ripples destroy reflections of brighter days" speaks to me of the way in which present circumstances and situations can be informed and relate to the past
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