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Scars

Numerously stabbed
The fragile skin cracks
Revealing
Inner screams
Not sufficing
Starvation's eruption
A payback for the mutilating
Cruel
Environment

Author notes

Hidden Anger by ~bugdown <- Used as a prompt. Don't ask me for something better, I wrote this just before going to sleep.

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  • Unsigned gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    OK...firstly I thought you penned this piece very well.
    Secondly your chosen subject matter was in line with the prompt...

    but what I got here was pain...I felt it..if this was written from the heart I am so sorry I posted the prompt...


    Simon

  • imahealer
    May 22, 2008

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    Another deep take on the prompt from a younger poet who might or not, be fighting the demon of anorexia or cutting, never seen in my generation, but understood. I saw not what you saw and felt, but this is acutely original. Best wishes.

    Shana


  • Fourthaxis
    May 22, 2008
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    >Feelstheheat< The anger appears to be quite transperent, huh?
    Nice poem. Peace!
    Anansey


  • In Too Deep1
    May 22, 2008

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    such an intense take on the prompt. Wonderful word choices. Loved the flow and emotion. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp