sharpened incisors spew
vitriolic words into
acid burnt pustules
suffocating
porcelain beauty
dis
in
te
grat
ing
with each incision
of hateful diatribe
my soul bleeds
Author notes
20 words more or less
Prompt: Picture
Credit: ~ Hidden Anger by ~bugdown
A contest entry
- Dark Quickie 10*20 by Unsigned.
450 points, ended May 22, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WOW margaret..great poem..well done on your silver..xxx
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Holy heck!! That is fantastic!!! So fitting for that pic.. congrats on the silver!!
And I learnt a new word = vitriolic .. cool
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Congrad's on the silver! Very deserving read. As the beauty fades with each incision...my soul bleeds! I relate really well to this poem right now. ~Sie
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I just knew your poem would place in this contest. I smell talent a mile away. Every poem won, that I knew would! CONGRATULATIIONS!
Shana -
Beautifully done poet...I loved the flow and poer of your words..
Thank you and well done
Simon
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Stunning work here. I like this a lot. Very creative and really deep emotions here. Darkness pours through this, and it is to my taste. Good luck in the competition Margaret.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
x
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You never cease to amaze with your brilliance! Wonderfully done indeed. I love how you did this.
Linda
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Fantastic command of the English language. Wonderful use of the word disintegrating. Adds to the sadness of exposition. Best wishes iin this contest. Great write! Title appropriate, as I cringed with every cut!
Shana
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So filled with emotion, movement and color. Beautifully presented. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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omg mum this is like the darkest thing I have ever read from you and I LOVE IT hehehe, it screams the picture..it just screams so loud lol...and love the word breaking up like that, perfect
Good luck
Cin
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