Her bitten lips
scarred by his
massive insecurities.
Unaware that
sunlight existed,
Hope's curtains
withdrawn;
temporary shelter -
crack-ed den of
iconic highs;
for the lows gave
rock-bottom its
new name. Lost.
A contest entry
- Woman in a motel by AJ Morelli.
2000 points, ended May 27, 22 entries
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what an interesting take on the contest prompt, so glad to "find" this here, very strong opening too...
thanks
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Inspiring
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Wow! The impact of this is just so powerful. This is so honest and real, and quite affecting. That last thought, of the bottom being "lost" . . . that just lingers on the mind like an echo, as does the feeling. Perfect ending!
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Brillantly written; emotive and strong. Well done with this.
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powerful imagery
powerful words, gripping story! one of your best my friend!
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Thank you my dear friend...
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This is a powerful write. Many of us know the person you are writing about. Very well done. Thanks.
Garrison
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Garrison, just know that i appreciate yo for your wisdom, your talents and support.
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Well done, sis. Good luck and write on. One.
Dez
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