Moist lids, unglued -
prayers released from
heart. Trails depart;
encumbered by the nonsense
that is emptiness.
Hence, truth quivers -
unzips itself of fear;
the massiveness of a world
beyond this world,
enlightens with blinding
awareness.
Running into the wild
a spirit scathed,
winds billow to a new race.
Joy streams through each gasp,
as sweat immerses with,
liberation.
Breath finds its way
re-mingles instead
to the life giving source;
coursed to a freedom that
activates with courage.
Author notes
I am liberated, as the universe liberates itself to me.
A contest entry
- Big Challenge, Big Points by ChildoftheWild.
1500 points, ended June 5, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lyrical and filled with substance both visual
and meaningful. I liked the liberal use of
moisture here: streams, sweat, breath, immerse...
acting as a common thread for the sense of feel.
Then, that is intertwined with a sensitive flow
of deeper thought. Well deserving of gold. Blue
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Thank you so much!
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Ah yes. the poetic evolution of the beautiful Lady L . . . You just keep getting better and better every time I read you!!!! Was visiting your page a while back and reading some of your latest postings . . . Tonight my face smiles and bows in your direction . . .
Marc
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This is very strong and rich in its texture. I loved your phrasing and how each stanza was nearly able to stand on its own. All combined it's a very powerful piece. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you so much...I'll be around later to read your works as well.
Be Blessed!
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You're really a pro, I think, your poems are so accomplished, I can only hope to get close to well done, congrats on the gold.
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Excellent
What beautiful free verse you write, dear poet. I read this several times and with each read I felt elation. A wonderful write of someone that has found thenselves...at peace with themselves and the world. Yes, this was quite an excellent piece, indeed. Very well done. Billy Rob
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Yes, and quite a journey it is. Self-awarness is somehting that I cherish.
Thank you for the awesome comment.
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Well earned gold. This is excellent. This inspires one to write! Thank you.
Garrison
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loved it! congrats on the win. very deserving of gold!
blu
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thankyou so much...Blu! Missed you.
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You really deserved a gold for this there is so much good about it I don't know where to start so I'll just congrat you on the gold.
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Thank you, you are kind.
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Congratulations ...
on a very worthy Gold.
Love
Myra
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Thank you darling, I'm on my way to read your entry...congrats on your prize too.
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nice...
and I feel somehow.. LIBERATED L.O.L. seriously this is a great piece of writing from a great writer no less!
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What a beautiful deliverance you have described here! Love how you have manipulated the sounds of the words to your advantage. This piece displays such strength of spirit after adversity. A really encouraging write. May breath continue to find its way!
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Thankyou for your comment and your gift of wisdom.
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we breathe the breath of the ancients, my friend..indeed we do...beautiful, pondering, write.
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Thank you Carol.
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Wonderful. Almost missed this. Makes me curious though... Hmmm... Nonetheless, good luck and write on, sis. One.
Dez
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thank you so much for being so there...and so supportive.
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This poetic trip though your imagination is, thought provoking, descriptive, and creative all rolled up into a beautiful poem. Your poem express great emotion and carries a consistent theme through out the poem with little wording and that is hard to do. You have painted a picture with words that tantalize, teas and catapult the reader into a fantasy as we experience your passion.
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Thank you so much Emile! Love that you truly picked up the essence of me through this write.
Again thank you for your comment.
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Amazing LL. Thank you so much for your wonderfully unique writing. It is so hopeful and elegant. This is what I had hoped to see here. Thank you so much for joining my contest.
Much Love
Carrie
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