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touched purple

 

 

 

 

 

want turned weary, faded
between the lines
of her transparent life, edited

by unfocused, foreign

eyes.
 
if she was so easily read,
there would be more to her answer
than this:
 
everything slips,
falls behind pages turned
too many times-
dog-eared, twisted by eyes
that hid
behind books of need.

 

long dusty. Unread.
 
and, in the wrong light,
every bookcase becomes a metaphor
for vacant.

 

people are complex, with so much ease

each is the same,
simply read by different light,
 
so she looks to her words
to uncover when she was damaged
like this,

 

ignores those absent marks
of others - unsettled
in her margins.
 
 
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

For 'someone' - she has enough courage and patience for her words to return in their order. I hope she finds someone, not to make them happy or her happy - but because, before she does, she'll have found all she ever needed.

Prompt
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"I always wanted
to warn those around me
to beware of damaged people;
to beware of me."

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  • "every bookcase becomes a metaphor
    for vacant."

    stop blowing me away.

    Never


  • Friday gold member
    June 16

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    This just... astounds me. Your work is always absolutely amazing but you've outdone yourself with this one. It aches in the beautiful, painful way that makes it so very real. I really don't know what to say other than 'wow'.

    Thank you

  • Fug-azi
    May 26

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    another lesson given by a master of tragic beauty. Everytime I read something by you I search for an error or even a glimmer of something that doesn't "fit" .. to date I have not found one.

    To me you have come as close to perfecting your art as is possible and I not only applaud you but bow as well.


  • Naridill
    May 22
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    Just this -

    p.s you stole my quote


    • EvilKate gold member
      May 22
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      Oops - I didn't see your name on it - my bad

      • Naridill
        May 22
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        Dictionary.com

        Damaged [n] - Heather


        Well, close enough.


        • EvilKate gold member
          May 22

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          Oh pish! - people with bruises are the interesting ones. Well, it seems to be the pattern

          And the so called 'Undamaged' folk? - they just hide behind other peoples bruising (and/or cause it).




          • Naridill
            May 22

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            Unless the bruising is in patches.. & then, they even chop themselves up to fit behind the layers of bruising. Well, I'd like to hope so, would save the bruised from doing it.
  • Wow, I always thought a bookcase cradled the whole world ... are there really people who see a bookcase as vacant? Sorry, somehow that made me sad, but this is an amazing insight into those stories that have meaning only to the author ... and a very loving comment to someone in need of her words

    • Curiosity makes me ask why you think she is saying the bookcase is vacant.. I didn't get that at all. I see words in this, both written and unwritten, by both the subject and those around the subject.

      I see reprieve in and from words as well. But I do not at all see a vacant bookcase. Perhaps the words are hidden, but they always exist.
  • haha - irnores?

  • Faithbound gold member
    May 22
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    This is beautiful. Truly beautiful.

  • Also..

    thanks.

    For not throwing sympathy at me, or panicking.




  • I make no assumptions about who your 'someone' is. I can only say that my words are resting. They need a break from cliques and cliches and rivalry and contests. I lose their meaning in all those things.

    There are always more words, nothing stops them from being written, but sometimes self preservation stops them from being shared.

    I had a bad day, that's all.

    I can't even explain why exactly, only that I got so fed up...

    It was intensely difficult for me to wrangle the beast that lashes with teeth, and you didn't bring her out..someone else did. So no worries, okay?

    There will be more words. New words. They are the best kind.






    • Faithbound gold member
      May 22
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      Hey there, I agree that sometimes our words do get lost in all the hype we try to avoid or enter into. New words that are not restricted are certainly the best kind. I hope your break is not a long one.
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