intolerant, heart so cold
she is extreme, unafraid to be bold
as time dragged on, her heart literally froze
and this is how her story goes
her heart had turned to solid ice
she met a boy, he seemed so nice
she broke her promise to herself and fell in love with him
who knew she would fall upon eternal rest in the end
as the relationship went further and rounded every base
he left her, she had fallen from grace
with a shattered, glass-like heart, she was drowning in tears
all that remains are silent screams for noone to hear
A contest entry
- You're a heartbreaker by flyingphoenix.
475 points, ended June 11, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
so...???
Comments
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Oh, so sad, but good!
This is really good, it doesn't give much hope to us heartbroken girls, but it was amazing.
Some good rhyming here, with some excellent use of words, I particulaly liked the way you described her frozen heart.
Great write, thanks for entering and good luck
Sunny
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