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True Freedom

 

Broken and wretched, bruised and torn,
My Years trailed behind like broken wings,
With no will, no strength again to stand,

My heart now moved by conviction within.

Burning, such tears had I never shed,

As looking up did I see a lamb

Who wore a cruel crown upon his head,

Engraved with the wonderful name 'I AM'.

Deep red ran the wounds that set me free.

From that moment, God's child, eternally.




 

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Well this is my moment, at the age of 19. I hope that religious writes are acceptable for this contest.

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  • Lanasaur
    February 3

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    wow

    this is a strong poem about thoughts of god,i really enjoyed this it's very intresting.
    keep penning
    lanaxx


  • Meme Wheeler
    July 18, 2008

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    This is truly amazing. I came to the full understanding of Christ's sacrifice for me at the age of 20, and I have never looked back. After giving my heart over to Him my life has never been the same. Yes, I have had struggles, trials, and many hard things I've had live through in my life, but Jesus has been my strength through it all. I could never go back to the way I use to be after knowing Him who has set me free from sin, and death! I loved the way you described him as a lamb for He is the Lamb of God. Thanks for sharing this with me.

    Meme


  • DevinCora
    July 18, 2008

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    ahhh im not a very religiousy gal but i did enjoy this write... it felt almost nystcal to me which is good because then you realize you arebt just writing for one set of viewers...

    Burning, such tears had I never she

    that was my fav line. it sounds so dark and mythical.... in fact it really inspires me. great write


    • Dreamana
      July 18, 2008
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      It is good that, despite the Christian theme, you were able to appreciate this write. Thank you for commenting

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Sometimes it is hard to see the love of a God when you are surrounded by much pain in sadness but this is a good piece thanks for sharing much luck


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 27, 2008

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    Stunning writing. I love the metaphor too. Amazing writing here. Great imagery. Very very profound indeed, and deep. Good luck in the contest my friend. Although, this is a trophy winner to me.

    Wayne Leon


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    Well written

    You have penned here a wonderfully written poem.The words are full of strong emotion and I enjoy reading such poems like this.You have written with your heart and this shows through your words.I wish you the best in this contest.Take care my friend, and many beautiful blessings to you and yours.
    Your friend in poetry,
    ~Angel~


  • Topaze gold member
    May 23, 2008
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    Oh a lovely piece of work, very well done indeed. Thank you for your fine entry in the contest.

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