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Copper to gold

Your heart of copper,
in silent need of repair
I'll help make it gold once more
I promise,
I'll keep it safe.

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  • notorious gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    "in silent need of repair"
    Nice phrase...vulnerability/calls for help are often silent but steadfast.


  • Little Lottie
    May 22, 2008

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    I love the metaphor. It isn't overly done but still very lovely. The last line especially caught my attention. We, my girlfriend and I, both had issues trusting at first but we promised to keep each other's hearts safe and the fact that you used this really hit home on my heart. Thank you.


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    Liked the copper to gold metaphor you used here; easy to read and understand. We want to help,we want to love and do what we can to make someone;s life better and happier - especially if it includes our life too.