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Temptress

Movements of a temptress
Steals another innocent soul

Bodies heating
      sweat gathers
    From anticaption

As she whispers so inticingly
Tóqueme, el Placer mí, Teaste mí....

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10 poets
25 words
60 min

If used, please credit: "Erotic" by Matthew Cooke (http://matthewcooke.deviantart.com/art/Erotic-47619272)


Translation:touch me,pleasure me,teaste me....

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  • Intricate Wordsmith
    May 28, 2008
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    Good luck in my contest.


  • crazymomma
    May 26, 2008

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    I am at a loss for words. This totally blew me away. I really loved the line about stealing another innocent soul. Temptation gets all of in maybe not from sex but somehow. GREAT POEM!


  • Galaxy2
    May 22, 2008

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    'Movements of enchantress'
    the charm starts
    'steals another innocent soul'
    how innocent!
    'bodies heating'
    somebody call the fire brigade
    'sweet gathers
    from anticipation'
    everything's sweet about this game
    'she whispers so inticingly'
    who can resist that lyrical whisper, honey!

    Brilliant!
    Kisses...all over!

    Galaxy2


  • KayJay
    May 22, 2008

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    Senusal, erotic, wonderful... I was lost in the beautiful phrasing and flow... Excellent entry... Thank you for the "lift" (LOL)...
    Ken

    • Angelflower
      May 22, 2008
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      lol.. thanks for the bronze! I won it when I was sleeping!!! maybe I should sleep more often when I enter contest?! again thank you..


  • buffsab99
    May 22, 2008

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    Wow

    baby sister you are going to be giving kiwigirljacks a run for her money in the sensual writing department. Amazing job with this.


    • Angelflower
      May 22, 2008
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      Lol.. thanks brother .. I doubt it though.. she's like the queen of sensual writes!! lol.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    mmm lol very hot the temptress working her wonderful spell Julie *clappy* *clappy* *clappy*


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 21, 2008
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    Ohhh... love the foreign language at the end sis.. wahooo... that was very tempting and enticing indeed!!!

    Love it

    • Angelflower
      May 21, 2008
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      Lol.. thanks sis.. I'm glad that you like this.. It kind of sucks because to say like three words in spanish it comes out with like five!!! lol.. oh well.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    wants to read wants to read


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