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acid

Aphids
eating at the acid
in his hips,

and lips
are peeling
like oranges;




your ladybug eyes
are trying on cancer spots
for charity,

just like you tried
on
me.

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    damn, very nicely done.


  • najji
    May 22, 2008

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    >>
    this is amazing,
    and I told you that you were going to win that contest.
    and you did. I got silver.

    I..
    wow..

    'your ladybug eyes
    are trying on cancer spots
    for charity,

    just like you tried
    on
    me.'

    that was amazing.