Four strings
bellow
their soulful cries -
mingling pitch;
thousands of
life's
beautiful
Minuets.
Author notes
Prompt:
13 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Brevity shouts by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended May 22, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
Comments
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So delicate and moving... x
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Delicately penned in harmony with theme... The more I read, the more I'm in awe of your ability to see the world thru beautifully poetic eyes... Well done.
Ken
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Hello Perception. I like the words you used; creates a very delicate picture. Life is full of those harmonious moments. Regards.
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A lot said in 13 words. Metaphor upon metaphor, just as life is.
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a nice statement intermixing concepts
humorously I see the title being manifold by the ending
this reflects a little how one little embodiment of elatedness makes for others. the music is conducively connecting thinking or actual joining so "thousands of
life's
beautiful" breaks off into new interests from the partitioned inspiration, to a plural. sort as I sing a lullaby it can split off in direction upon repeating for emphasis also.
fillable ideas in flow,
babies are my subject -
Very cool. Almost haiku-esqu lol!! Choppy, yet moves....like a violin. good job!
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Beautiful with brevity and flow. A most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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