dark river
rooted in lonely ground
stilled flow
black lake
I cannot break the surface
A contest entry
- 15 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love this on so many levels. i see solitary and the urge to break it.
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The title makes me invert the image I have in my head as I read the poem. The poem itself initially made me look at what this concise little poem describes, but then after considering the title, I begin to picture this scene from inside the lake. In that respect, it makes this poem both beautiful and haunting.
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I like your description of it as an inversion. I would not have thought of it that way, but you're right. The structure does necessitate a shift in perspective. Thank you!
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A great struggle..tension filled. Beautiful.
Mylee -
beautiful
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really like the combination of simplicity and depth. nicely done with strong images.
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this is very nice...
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