Despair has no wings,
Nor has love,
No countenance:
They do not speak.
I do not stir,
I do not behold them,
I do not speak to them,
I am as real as my love
and my despair.
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A contest entry
- Quickie!!!!! by Angelflower.
730 points, ended May 22, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring your best PW (5 to 50 words) QUICKY by Meroza.
700 points, ended April 1, 54 entries
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Comments
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May I be so rude and come with a tip?! This poem is quite messy at the point being, mainly because you are using the same words more then once. Try re-writing it and not use a single word twice or more, for in these short poems here it really do make it look ugly if you ignore that little golden rule. Just a hint
Good luck
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this is short but very very good,
its riddle sort of, i love it,
xxx love ya xxx
love kitty xxx
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Good write and I like how it seems to me that the despair is more then an emotion in this but it is you. As you said,
" They do not speak.I do not stir,
I do not behold them,
I do not speak to them,"
It seems to me like the despair becomes one with you, and the last line really just completeles that sense. Still it is good. -
Ahh! my poet is going to the dark side! I loved the first two/three lines.
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This was a really good take on the prompt..
Created an image that is both dark and thought provoking really.. great job..
Best of luck..
Angel
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Beautiful!! The whole concept of darkness, love and despair always make for the best writes (at least in my opinion) You did a wonderful job with the prompt and I hope you do well with it for your contest bro.
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Ahh despair and love are indeed such strong emotions!! Great write, fitting for the pic
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