it’s about sucking
the last crumb offered
from another’s fingertip
how a flick of tongue
[in a crowded room]
spells out w.a.n.t.
in a private language
all else fades
to a background hum
as they imagine
lips pressed, hips joined,
long & slow, quick & slick
in a moan-sigh grind
to final bitter-sweetness
it’s about how a smile
curves around a pulse
that says they see
eye to eye
Author notes
option #1 - quiet delight
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You are a true poetic artist
As with most of what I have read of yours this was awesome. You have a way with words and a way of expressing your self and thoughts and perceptions that I truly envy
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Another wonderful write
congratulations on your award such sensual wording,
Warm thoughts.
frozentearz
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WOAH! This is stupendous!
Congratulations on the Gold. You a re a superb writer!
Paul
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Great great soft sensual imagery. Wonderful images of lovers fading into each other.
Becky
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Excellent, you took this prompt and broke the box! I love the depth of intimacy here, the little moments of time lovers share when the world fades and they exist only in each other. Just delightful imagery - loved it. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!!
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I read "it's about sucking" and you 'sucked' me into this poem rightaway.
Ooh I don't often come across something that tastefully sensual as you have here
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Soft & Juicy
Sweet, sweet piece here LU. Not a hint of coarseness in this delicate piece of sensual writing. I love how the first verse becomes a powerful metaphor for the remaining (at least for me). It's like, I can almost remember those occasional parties/places when this type of connection happened. Somehow, mostly it was all between my ears, playing out what I wanted from that 'someone' across the room
Best wishes in the contest
-Emmjay
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I really like the second to last stanza! Excellent work!
I mean the whole piece comes together really well.
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