They pointed fingers-
bony and long
calling names;
nose shaped broader
skin shading a caramel hue -
Yet, the quill poised in pun
strode miles with written word;
fevers coughing,
suppressing indigent truths with
government rules set to
lull a conscience into quiet death.
Standing,
voices coursed;
scribing,
shaping, sculpting,
molding ideas -
walking thoughts.
Footprints left to change a future.
Repression marked oppression
rising to uprisings
for independence interdependent;
built beyond penned truths.
Words slipped past literary praises,
voices echoed without name,
sonnets mentored without sonneteering,
procuring Sonetos,
definitive of the times,
unique in voice.
It was a new phase of expression!
Mozambique becoming!
A shared blossom;
a strength to be reckoned with.
Author notes
Prompt is: Surge et Ambula [ get up and walk]
A contest entry
- Surge et Ambula [ get up and walk] by Peteskid.
1800 points, ended May 28, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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'fevers coughing,
suppressing indigent truths with
government rules set to
lull a conscience into quiet death.'
As is always the way, Government corruption blights the hopes and dreams of nations. Let them keep chanting and dreaming hope, that vibrations may rise on voices to a higher level of understanding.
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What a wonderful write on the African concious. So many thing going on that we never hear about, your poem speaks well to this. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the silver.
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Pamela, this was such an amazing testament to the power of the poetic voice, both yours and de Noronha's. A beautiful entry, so worthy of the honor it received.
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ten thousand cicadas
Thank you so much. I am pleased for your comment here. And Congratulations to you as well for your wonderfully crafted poem. Worthy of gold and much more.
~Pamela 
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"to
lull a conscience into quiet death"
this line seemed to cast the whole piece
into visionary focus for me. So apt and
at the same time; quite lyrical as is the
whole verse. Your stream of perception
flows and strenghtens as your hand finds
its way fluidly through each new prompt.
Blue
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Blue
My friend, it is always a pleasure to receive a review from you on my work. Thank you so very much.
~Pamela
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Ah, Sonetos of antiquity in Iberia.
"Mozambique Becoming" is a powerful song for East African people; island people. Your free verse is becoming more and more compelling every time I read it.
This poem is a wonder to behold in any modern literary magazine.
You manage the problematical issues; the politics ~ but you do not, ever, slip into the prosaic.
Quoting is not a habit I encourage but I shall quote:
"fevers coughing,
suppressing indigent truths with
government rules set to
lull a conscience into quiet death."
You manage to versify very well what could, in other hands, read as a welfare workers report.
I admire your style; intelligence and voice.
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Ron
Thank you for such an amazing review on this piece. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Congratulations
on the silver trophy!
Soon, you will have a publisher's house putting out your first book of poetry as an established poet. Get a good agent.
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Your words have captured the voices of the african people so wellTis a most profound penning vivid and descriptiveA far cry from the ordinary write's of today.Your beautiful gift for poetry is my blessingThank you for sharing your unique talent.
Tony
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Tony
Thank you for such a wonderful comment. I appreciate your words very much. ~Pamela
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Your understanding of the trials of these people is evident in every line you pen! Outstanding write!
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NeonRose
Thank you so much for your kind and positive words regarding this piece. I appreciate them so much! ~Pamela
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As some of Africa rises, some die a little each day; Chad with its greedy grasp by the Chinese, Darfur and its genocide by corrupt governments and meglomaniacs...and all the while the governments in the free world shake their heads but do little. If only they would see through another's eyes..maybe someone could make the change a permanently beautiful one for these proud and ancient people. Love, C
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C
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I appreciate it so much. ~Pamela
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I do so appreciate your intelligent poetry. you show a real grasp on the history of Africa. I love the first lines and your use of "footsteps." Good Luck! ~ Joyce
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Joyce
Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate your comments so much. ~Pamela
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Wonderful, descriptions and historical references to the growth of a nation and a turbulent time of change, painful birthing of African nations and groups; and literature sometimes a call other times an answer but always so much in evidence...so very well done here. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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PK
Thank you so much for the honor of silver in your contest. I am truly humbled an thankful as there are some trophies that mean more than others. This one is very special. Thank you so much. ~Pamela 
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