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as the night shimmers brightly dark..

Amazing how dark shows light on our deepest emotions.
Feelings become more intense as our shame melts its fortress of our fragile bodies.
Tomorrow never comes, the day is over, it is a black hole. Nothing matters.
How long are you going to live anyway.
Soon you will see the brights lights, the time is now.

The day is dead, for the numb.
Emotions don't mean anything, thoughts are mindless.
People digging holes,
destiny turning them into graves.
Its light, but nobody can see.
In the dark everything becomes clear.
Excitement is high, new lives are created, hope is glowing.
Glory never prevails.
The day comes to fast and leaves us only with tearful regrets.

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  • Angelflower Greeters member
    May 22

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    Welcome To Allpoetry

    Hello LonelySurfer ,

    This was a very interesting read.. The flow in your words seemed a little unsteady in some places and that made it a little hard to go along with the image that you were trying to create here with your words.. But an image there is, and it was really interesting..I would just say to keep on working with the flow in your words and you'll do great!!!
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