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Echoes of a slamming door
And I’m struck down
Pressed with devastation
The weight suffocates



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I have carefully thought it out and have come to the conclusion... What?... Who you talkin' 'bout?

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    The ending is where the strength lays -

    nicely done.


  • Bams
    May 21, 2008

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    second half strongest gist

    this has event and analysis becoming connected physically

    relating to this is all too often, even a baby in thick separation of choice with swung door that can slap upon ear and tonal ton... a child with hard delight of crib can be like no swaddling time from cosleeping of womb per se which can force understanding, but as pregnant woman never holding bottom of belly for bass note!

    deep ties to developed --
    babies are my subject