Where to get back the faith I had once
lost in despair of all sorrow and pain
tears of sadness are shed in its absence.
Precious years waste in grievance
echoes of my pleas resound in vain
where to get back the faith I had once
Intensive search for this wanted credence
unhappiness smiles with a grin of disdain
tears of sadness are shed in its absence
My heart bleeds and cries in dark silence
yearning to see the existential light again
where to get back the faith I had once
A strong need to regain my soul's balance
to be freed of this faithless chain.
tears of sadness are shed in its absence
Praying to feel its comforting presence
to a soft wind take away this cloud of bane
Where to get back the faith I had once
tears of sadness are shed in its absence
Author notes
edited, reposted
Written in 2004
Not personal as in feeling as if I had lost faith. I still believe in pretty much everything
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I wouldn't know the form if it came up and bit me on the butt but I do understand the message well. The form is a medium you used so well to deliver the message. Write on my friend write on.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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wow, you DO rhyme ...
and what a complicated form you have chosen here ...
you did a masterful job with it, chapeau !
your poem reads as if it was written by another mari, one I don't really know (yet) ...
I perceive you in a completely different manner, with a completely different energy than expressed in this verse here ... less heavy and burdened than what I get from these lines ...
sigh ...
I guess I must go and play a yemanja-song now ...
marion
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No no! This poem doesn't reflect what I feel, but how I would feel IF I had lost my faith. I may have lost many things, many times during those 42 years, but faith...no, always there, here...
Next rhyme, if I can, will be a sonnet in your honour
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Lovely- you do rhyming so well!! I've written a triolet before, like a year ago I think...
I think 'twas titled "like water"
This is so well done Mari. The rhymes don't feel forced and it flows so naturally well. Good job! And yes, faith is good And yes, I have a villainelle too, lol- both are such wonderful forms!
- namita
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Thanks Namiriza
Could you send me the links to your Villanelels and Triolets? They are two forms I really like
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I've deleted a lot of my old ones...but I think I still do have the villainelle. *search search*
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ah...it is so hard to reclaim lost faith...isn't it? I feel you with this one.
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Mi querida hija
I notice that your leader says "Rhymes To Hugh" So here goes from el padre:
If you can keep your Faith, all is not lost
although the road of life is hard and rough,
keep walking straight and never count the cost.
However much you are abused or bossed
by those who, constantly, your work rebuff,
if you can keep your Faith, all is not lost.
When those you trusted leave you double-crossed
and feed you treachery, don't give a stuff!
Keep walking straight and never count the cost.
If you have made your goal some distant post
which seems too far when you have had enough,
if you can keep your Faith, all is not lost.
Keep walking straight and never count the cost.
There you are mi querida hija,
Applausos, abrazos y bezos con amor, XXX el padre.
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i like this, for its wishful quality; i have had something like this idea...that there was a time when belief left so little room for doubt...and yet somehow happiness can rise above and we find new ways to feel wonderful about life...such a thoughtful writing here...h
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You still believe in prettu much everything huh?
Do you still believe in Eurovision songcontest? lol, cause I don't
We didn't get through semi-finals again
they all vote for their neighboring countries
I don't like the eurovision music, but I'm gay so I like it
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I like using forms that have rhyme, Villanelle and Triolet are two of my favourites.
Thanks Nic
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I know your faith, have known it for years, and you know my lack, and yet you've never judged me, at least not out loud, for the most part we've respected the other's opinion (and yes I know, you think I'm entirely ignorant, lol) But the point is, thank you. Thank you for tolerating my sometimes challenging that faith, and more often being ignorant of it.
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Not loud and not in any way. And no, I don't think you are ignorant at all, quite the contrary
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Acknowledging the author notes,
one might conclude that the writer,
perhaps, is now searching closer
to herself to find her faith
rather than searching afar,
for faith begins within.
Aesthete
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Faith has always been present. The intensity might change, but as far as I can remember, it never left my heart
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This poem I think reaches many to the heart. Since the basics of life seems to flush away in many mathers.
Still we might have a belief in a better way off life once we overcome these uncertainnes. These thoughts are coming to my mind reading these lines.
Nice flowing rhythm, balance in word and length.
Wim -
Something about this poem suggests that for once, less is more when it comes to my commenting. I will say that it applies to all types of faith, not just religious, and on those grounds it hit home. Thank you.
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