Words;
dripping from her lips
[venom from a snake.]
You're beautiful.
Poison -
sinking
in.
Author notes
Prompt:
She told me it was a lie.
Ew. I don't usually write like this.
I dont like it either.... Uhg.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie me... by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
Comments
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On the contrary its perfect! The best I have read so far! I love it! I love the metaphor and the way ur thoughts crooked the evil way! Thanks for entering and good luck! Pri
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I do like it. Yes, it has an unpleasant edge to it that made me cringe...but it made an impact. That's the kind of poetry i like. You deserve to place in this contest.
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very nice indeed. and words can be just like poison. great imagery here.
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like the imagery in your words, it's hypnotic and dangerous. Best of luck in the contest.
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Very nice and nasty (LOL)... Well done.
Ken
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I like this piece. Lies are like poison. Nice use of metaphor. Good luck in the contest.
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this is good - so few words, but it really bites. Good luck in the contest.
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Tell you what though...it's good. The truth may hurt, I'm sorry if you don't like it. The poem has depth and I wish you luck.
~Kystal Angel
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