the tight fit of squares
against circles never
more apparent
when we move side to side
knight to night-moves
from black to white
skin meets sheets
in the dawn
Author notes
for my man, yepp ... we move into our squares to regain balance
In a list
A contest entry
- 30 words by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended May 22, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yup
gold from begining to end
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Amazing strategies are required to play chess, Wednesdays, or otherwise... but I see you're beyond mastering the basics. ~ KL
P. S. It is Gold, too!
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splenderiferous
You know, at first I would have thought this to be about me, but then I realized that I would never play chess on Wednesdays. Now, if the title had been more on the lines of "He likes to play chess on Thursdays and fuck every other day of the week" or something like that, then there would have been almost mostly no doubt that it could possible have been about me.
At least I think so...
Nicely done, it's been a challenging week and this provided me with that stimulus I needed to return that twisted, perverted and lecherous smile to my face.
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Nicely put together - chess, the tight fit of squares, knight-to-night, moves, moving together, black to white. Liked the comparison: the game and the relationship. Your author notes are a fun added finish to this!
Congratulations on the gold.
Marlene -
i feel like a peeping tom.
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just look with one eye, we don't mind.. lololol
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Love the allusion of the beginning, .. but you know? I'm not so sure it's circles and squares..
it seems more like spaces and forms.
I loathe gender typing.. I do, because some never go beyond what it implies ..for women especially, but men too ..
and oddly your circles and squares
became round pegs in square holes and would you believe it? lol made me think of gender roles..
I'm odd....I know.. lol, and I have no control over where my mind winds up..
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i do know what you're saying, although i couldn't quite figure out to do square with square? ya know.. maybe i'll figure it out
but i do love how your mind works.. it always amazes me, how you quickly find where i was going and how to reach the end too
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for me -- square on square.. would imply an equality but not necessarily a balanced one because the equality would only be in the 'square' - the size of it wouldn't matter..
also it would erect a wall in my mind, rather than a union, whereas the circle square .. hmmm could be equal in size but never in 'form' .. I think it depends on what you're after..
lol.. and thank you..
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I play chess only on Thursdays
when I think it's Wednesday
always ends a deuce
and Friday
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Nothing like love to spark great poetry It is good to read your heart these days, my friend. Love, lane
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took your advice luv.. hehehhe
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That little bit of punctuation seems odd in there but that's about all that feels strange. The most beautiful thing between any two people is the feeling of arms wrapped tightly, bodies clenched underneath the moonlight. Possibly in the morning or just before bed. These little moments are what creates poetry in the world. Your poem is strong because it is human. And tender. And you.
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Damn lady.....need more tissues....*sighhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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Very clever, yes, and lovely as always. Now I need to go back and read his one with the squares in it
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hahahahah english opening, how very dare you!! lolololol
really now D...
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I like to play chess every night and twice on wednesdays.
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hhahahahhaha
ohhh my i think i'm blushing now... and my man will smile and protect my moves, he's my knight for sure.. -
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I'm only a rookie in need of some nookie. lol
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oohh dear, i think you better go and find yourself a woman to play some checkers with ... i'm sure you can make the right moves
unfortunately all my moves are for my Darin...
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Checkers!
Of course. Sounds much easier.
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Must use the English Opening, eh?
Checkmate!
good one!
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hehe nice word play...
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i wanna play chess now too
this is gorgeous poetry, gilly and wonderful application of metaphor here... loved the anticipation
"knight to night-moves"
... marvelous line, great play on words there!
just grand, my friend
can't wait for the next "move"
~ Nicolette
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i can't play either, well i can a bit, the real game, but the square thing, is a personal message for him, and he'll know why
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But it's sooooo much fun to be the pawn...
Or is that the one pawing LOL....
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as long as the man knows, nothing else matters
lolol Guy says he write to an audience of "one"
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well there's the message that all can see, then there's the one for him....
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I love the title of this one
also....this makes me think of dancing together..the play on words in this is so appropriate & I like
"skin meets sheets
in the dawn"
beautiful & playfully sensual, Gill
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thankie tara, so much
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