For the sublime reaches of my subconscious
an inner enigma of darkness overwhelms me…
And in such time I feel
nothingness,
blankness,
hopelessness.
And such for me is lost.
For every particle of my being are lost
Lost forever…
In the trap you call life
And everywhere I turn I wonder
why I am
alive,
breathing,
moving.
I wonder this as the blade comes
closer and closer…
And as for me
I lay there in such agony that I am being torn
apart by pain
and the forever infinitive nothingness
that I can not
overcome…
My thoughts twisting and tumbling and confusing me
minute by minute,
hour by hour,
day by day.
Forever lost as an empty shell
walking in this thing you call, “Life”
and I call, “Hell”.
For in my thoughts I stand on the brink of
insanity,
destruction,
chaos.
And in this time I am
ripping
tearing
twisting
wishing it all away.
The blackness of death
seems so comforting now.
For all would be gone and no one would care…
And as the blade makes contact,
I
breath
my
last
breath…
A contest entry
- dark....sad...make me CRY!!! by Emotional-wreck.
420 points, ended May 24, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - " Life From The Dark Side " by wingsofgold25.
500 points, ended June 3, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BLOOD STAINED TEARS (SUICIDAL LOVE) by Candy Morphine.
300 points, ended June 11, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let the Darkness Come by MichaelLeeSmyth.
700 points, ended April 7, 47 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very good, apparently you know how to read guidleines. Very E.A.P. always a good thing. I like the correlation you make with life and "The Pit...." The chas and confusion that is so very much a part of our everyday lives.
good luck in the contest.
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well.
this is AWSUM!!!!!
i love this poem with a passion.
its just so excellently written.
the way it flows is perfect!
i love of you use just those single words.
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This was a very well written piece Just wondering if this is your own style. I like it when Poets try something different. I do it myself sometimes gets kinda boring with the same oh sane oh.
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well...i think you did good...these are your strongest lines
Forever lost as an empty shell
walking in this thing you call, “Life”
and I call, “Hell”.
For in my thoughts I stand on the brink of
insanity,
destruction,
chaos.
And in this time I am
ripping
tearing
twisting
wishing it all away.
The blackness of death
seems so comforting now.
For all would be gone and no one would care…
And as the blade makes contact
Oh and i loved the ending!!Good luck & thanks for entering! -
This is so.... wow. That is all I can say, wow. Good job! I like this so much.
"The blackness of death
seems so comforting now.
For all would be gone and no one would care…
And as the blade makes contact"
That is beautiful.
Amazing, so well written.
I love this piece!!!!
Props!
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O MY GOD!!! I LOVE this!!! I have no words this was so great. Keep up the great work, and welcome to AP
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Thanks ^_^ I'll have more poetry in days to come...I have to transfer it all to allpoetry now. thanks again
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